The Mirror
There lived a beautiful princess named Britomart. She was not like any other princess. Britomart enjoyed the outdoors and adventuring in the unknown for she was fearless and determined. Ever since she was a child she was trained in the warlike ways, such as spearing and sword fighting and using a shield. She detested the feminine life style, such as fingering fine needle and fancy thread that many expected from her.
While wandering through a forest, Britomart came upon a home. It was psychic’s home. Britomart never really believed in psychics and there so called abilities, nevertheless, she was so driven by curiosity she knocked on the door. An elderly woman, wearing a cloak, answered the door. The elderly psychic was shocked at the presence of Britomart for princesses are never found in this part of the woods, especially at a psychic’s home.
The psychic under obligation welcomed Britomart into her home. Britomart had never seen so much clutter in a home before. There were things and stuff ever. It was a clutter. As Britomart was wandering through the home, she thought to herself and asked how anyone could ever live in a mess like this. Britomart pitied the psychic until she came upon a mirror in the far back of the home. It was the most beautiful mirror she had ever seen. It was round and hollow. It was like a globe.
Britomart questioned the psychic about the mirror. The psychic replied that it was a magic mirror. The psychic asserted that if you asked question, the mirror will reveal the answer to her. Now Britomart has a wonderful life. She had everything but sometimes it was lonely. Britomart has always looked up to her parents and their love for each other. All she ever wanted was for someone to love her as much as her father loved her mother. So she asked who and where her true love was.
The mirror revealed a gallant knight, named Artegall. He was dressed in finely made armor. His crest was a crouching hound and written on his armor was “Achilles’ arms, which Artegall did win.” Britomart was pleased with the mirror’s answer. Staring at Artegall in the mirror, Britomart fell in love with him.
She asked the mirror where and how she could find Artegall but unfortunately the mirror only grants one answer for every person. Despite this letdown, Britomart decided that finding Artegall would be her new adventure and goal. She ran out of the Psychic’s home and mounted onto her house and started her journey to finding her true love.
Author's note:
"The Mirror" was based off the story of The Magic Mirror. The story of The Magic Mirror begins with describing who Britomart is. Britomart is an unconventional princess. She enjoys fighting, adventuring, and weaponry. In this story Britomart is traveling with Knights. During the journey one of the knights, driven by curiosity as to why a princess would be dressed in armor and travel with knights, asks Britomart's reasoning for traveling with them. She lies to the knight and replies that she is on a quest to avenge herself against Artegall but really she is on a quest to find Artegall because she is in love with. As she is talking to the knight, Britomart reflects on how she fell in love with Artegall. Britomart came upon a mirror globe and in the mirror globe she saw the face of Artegall. He appeared to her as a gallant and majestic knight, clad in armor. She instantly fell in love with him and made it her globe to find him. In my story, I kept the overall characterization of Britomart but when into more detail about how Britomart came upon the mirror globe. I included a psychic to allude a more supernatural feeling. I also kind of incorporated a part of the story of Snow White into my story. I included the magic mirror aspect. I ended my story with the beginning of her quest.
"The Magic Mirror" from Faerie Queene: Britomart (1916). Web Source: Sacred Texts
I loved your story! I was cute, fun, and really easy to read! I liked that Britomart was able to get her one wish granted, but I liked that the ending of the story was sort of like a "cliffhanger" of "will she get to find her man"? I did notice just a few little grammatical errors. In the second paragraph, it should be "their" instead of "there". And in the last paragraph, I think you may have meant "horse" instead of "house". Super easy fixes though! Other than that, you did awesome!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. I'm not usually one for princess stories, but yours was certainly well-written and enjoyable to read. It looks like MaKenzi ^ pointed out the few grammar errors. I noticed them as well, but don't worry; they certainly don't detract from your story! It sounds like you did a good job sticking to the idea of the original story (based on your Author's Note - I haven't actually read it), so congrats on that. I feel like my stories often veer too far from the original, but oh well. Anyway, good job on this story!
ReplyDeleteSarah, I read the Britomart unit as well but could not find anything that I wanted to use for a storytelling post. It was laid out like a book with all interconnected chapters that I could not bear to break it apart. You did a lovely job though. I really enjoyed your rendition of the magic mirror episode. You are an excellent writer :)
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